TS- Explain the final, and most important reason that proves your THESIS using your character with a problem.
CD- Give one example, story, or dialogue about your character trying to solve the problem because of the above reason.
CM-Say why your CD is important
CS-Say your TS again in stronger more emotional words
Finally, and most importantly, Jose knows that he could be safer with a new iPod Touch. While Jose and Jenny were writing persuasive emails to Walmart trying to convince them to donate some iPods to East Newark, an old, rusty, black van pulled up to the front porch of Jose’s house. A dirty, smelly man rolls down a smoky window and pokes his bald, greasy head out of it.
“Hey girl, I just came from the hospital. Your mom was in a car accident. She asked me to pick you up! She said she needs you! Quick! Get in the back of the van, and I’ll take you there now!”
“OMG! That’s horrible,” said Jenny, “I’m dialing her number right now on my iPod Touch… Hi, mom!? Are you ok?… you are? You’re at home!? Mom, there is a strange man here that says he wants Jose and me to get in the back of his black, Chevy van. Yes, his license plates are VE2-NJ9. OK. I’ll tell him… My mom says she’s calling the cops on her other phone. You better drive away fast buddy. I doubt that East Newark cops like kidnappers in their town. Plus, I’m taking a picture of you and your van with my iPod touch right now.” Can you imagine what could have happened if Jenny and Jose got in the van? Can you imagine how Jenny’s mom would have felt if she had told her she couldn’t have that iPod Touch that saved her? For the sake of the safety and lives of our children like Jose and Jenny, we absolutely must find a way to get them all iPod Touches.